Hey Wayne!
i don't know shit about editing or metal music videos so...
- why's it have a title caption at the start? Do they need that? If they do, sort your layout out. I think the text/logo should be a bit smaller so it can have a bit more breathing space.
- Cool music video man! Looks pro. Well done! If I were making one, which I'm not and never have, I think I'd try putting some really fast cuts in at certain points in the song (like, say, when the drummer hits lots of drums really fast) to try and give the video a similar energy. At some points during this I was a bit like the video is kind of relaxing compared to the music. The flipside of that is that I'm not used to being able to see so clearly what the different people are doing for eg on guitar solos so that was nice. Closeups of the string bending and whatnot. Cool!
- At the end with the where to buy and captions and whatnot. Change to a nicer font (what is that, Arial?)! Don't write 'www.facebook' and stuff it's not cool. Maybe use icons instead and make 'em clickable, you already have the text in the vid description. Or at least just drop the www. and ending with / stuff. I think these layouts still need work, go seek out some examples to copy and learn from as I think it makes the difference between a truly pro presentation and a 'keen amateur' one.
Anyway, good to see you about and all that! Feel free to tell me to get stuffed with my feedback
:)